I only received one comment on my elevator pitch so I wasn't able to fully get a holistic approach to how I wanted to change it. I did make sure to make it shorter this time. My last video was 2 minutes long. I think I did a good job of keeping it concise this time.
https://youtu.be/5FsKwgXDGZw
You have a neat idea for your venture. Having the camera that close to your face though, was very distracting. It would also be good to mention how your venture would sustain itself, because even if it's a nonprofit, they have to have an income. If you're interested, I'll link my blog post below.
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Hey Emily,
ReplyDeleteI do like the idea a lot! It sounds a lot like the "tower gardens" that juice plus sells. I am a huge fan of those, and I think I would really enjoy your product as well! I do have to agree with Matt though. I think you would have been better off putting the camera on a steady surface and standing to give the pitch. Again, great job! Here is a link to my blog if you're interested:
http://ryangoodsonent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html